Friday, February 16, 2018

Week 5 Story: The Pen of Life

At his father's request, E.B. was cleaning out the barn. He typically resented such a chore, and had rather stay inside reading or writing than be outside getting dirty. Today, however, the barn was cool and peaceful, and E.B. found he didn't mind sifting through old junk. So far, he had come across broken furniture, collections of knick-knacks, and a whole pile of rotten wood. Next, he planned to clean out his great-grandfather's ancient writing desk.


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E.B. rolled back the top of the desk, and was astounded by what he found there. Lying amongst torn paper and dried pots of ink was the most beautiful pen he had ever seen. It was iridescent, shimmering gold and silver despite the dim light of the dusty barn. The pen was encrusted with rubies, emeralds, and sapphires, yet somehow did not appear gaudy. Despite its being made of precious metals and stones, E.B. knew that when he picked it up, the pen would be light in his hand, and easy to maneuver.

E.B.'s fingers trembled as he reached for the instrument, but as soon as he made contact, the pen seemed to come alive, warming in his palm. E.B. grabbed a piece of paper, and gently touched the pen's tip to the paper's edge. He was not surprised to find that the pen naturally held the darkest, richest ink imaginable. E.B. began to write.
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Without thinking of what he was doing, E.B found himself forming his great-grandfather's name in beautiful script: Allan. Suddenly, Allan's image appeared next to E.B. in the barn. Startled, E.B almost dropped the beautiful pen.

"Peace, E.B.," said Allan. "You have discovered your birthright. This pen is imbued with tremendous history and power. It descends from a great pen of lost times, a pen which wrote the future and the past. While the pen in your hand does not have the same power, it holds great potential. Anything you choose to write in its ink will vividly become life, as sure as I am standing in front in front of you now."

E.B. spluttered, unable to form words in his shock.

"Worry not," said Allan. "The desk contains hidden manuscripts and instructions for the pen's use. You will learn to use it carefully and thoughtfully. You will write, and write well."

As the ink of his name dried, Allan's image faded away. E.B. immediately tore from the barn and into the house; he knew the first story he must write.



Author's Note: "The Pen of Life" is a rethinking of the Moslem legend of the pen of Allah, with which he wrote the future and the past on the Tablet of Destiny. I began to imagine the power such a pen might hold today, and the beginning of E.B.'s story is the result.

5 comments:

  1. Jessie, I liked reading your story. I think the third person omniscient point of view and narrator made the story flow very well. Also, you incorporated great descriptions that made your story interesting to read, and these details helped me to visualize the different parts of the story. You did a good job, and I really enjoyed reading your story!

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  2. Hi Jessie! I really like your story. I think the way you took it was interesting and your retelling was great. I do think that you could expand on the setting and description and develop the story further that way. You do have a good sense of place and description of the barn, but I think that you could get more specific to really paint a picture of the pen or the desk in the reader's mind.

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  3. Hi Jessie! I love the detail of this story! Reading it, I felt like I was there! Your writing seems to really capture the mystical atmosphere that the pen invokes even though the story is set in modern times. I also really enjoyed your use of line breaks, which I haven't seen someone use in this class before. I might have to try something like that myself!

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  4. Hello Jessie! I like that you gave the story a more modern spin. It would be extremely interesting to see how such a pen might be used today. The story felt more like an introduction to the results of the pen in E.B.'s hands as opposed to a guess at what it would be like to have such a pen. It was really interesting and the description was really good. It was easy to imagine what was happening and see it in my head. Good work!

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  5. Hey Jessie!

    I like the detail you provide at the very beginning of the story with the main character cleaning. It gives the story a great start that draws the audience in. I also love how you describe the pen's power. E.B. didn't even know he had the power until he was already using it. What an interesting concept! Great job with this story!

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